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Some people think that large , impressive buildings are important for a city. Others believe that the money should be spent on improving schools and hospitals. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In today's world cities are given
importantane
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important
importance
 compared to villages, a good infrastructure is more important for a city. While others believe that the expenses could be used for the better improvement of
hospitals
 and
schools
. The reasons are discussed
further
 in the essay.
Firstly
, as technology is increasing rapidly day by day, the facilities are
also
 upcoming in many cities. Meanwhile, many people think that
for
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good infrastructure is important for a developed city or country.
For instance
, Mumbai is
the
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a
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 city
which
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that
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 has huge and amazing buildings and it's
also
 famous for
it's
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its
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 construction while many of them use it in
a
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the
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 opposite way because of tall buildings
such
 as for suicide attempts and many more. It is risky for all.
Secondly
 , a small amount of expense should
be utilise
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 for government
schools
 and
hospitals
 too.
However
, maintaining good cleanliness in both places attracts
the
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publicity
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public
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 to come.
For instance
, many places are avoided in terms of expenses and
such
 as
schools
 and
hospitals
 whereas these are the places where an individual can gain his or her career and grab the opportunities in their life. To conclude, in my
opinion
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schools
 and
hospitals
 are important and they should be well maintained for the good purpose, attractions are
also
 needed but education and health should be given more priority.
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