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Illiteracy has traditionally been viewed as largely a third world problem. However, it is becoming apparent that in countries such as the USA and Australia, illiteracy rate is on the increase. Discuss possible causes for this and its effect on society. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The entire
business
 depends on
education
 because it is important stuff in life because day by day technology is so advanced and
study
 is very helpful in
next
 date . In my opinion, I consider that short
study
 is a big effect in
future
 and It problem increasing in present. On the one hand,Iiiteracy has a traditionally big issue in the world and some countries
such
 as the USA and Australia short
study
 increasing It statement is some reason because big companies government provide all facilities in national
that is
 a big issue about it .Other words like one USA is a large group and policymakers provide all stuff in the society like foods ,public transport and health insurance and others.
For example
, Australia does not need any
education
 about starting any
business
 and serve about it 76%folks not doing
education
 and work because they are taking advantage of government staff.
As a result
 in the
future
 low
education
 is a big disadvantage and all people face problems in the
next
level
. ,
On the other hand
,some effects related to
this
 statement like individuals not doing good
business
 in the
next
level
 .To explain,
education
 is most effective in any activities but without information,folks do not maintain any work.For
thus
 The Japan survey
last
 year 56%man failed in
business
 because they do not have big
study
 and they not maintain a
future
.As
a
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 intence that way in a
future
level
 in down the skills and
next
-generation not doing any duty. In my conclusion, the government should be provided
free
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a free
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study
 in whole cities because that way increasing the
education
level
.
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