Some people hold the opinion that children should obey certain rules made by teachers and parents. Others, however, feel that these rules only limit children’s growth and impact their adult life later. Discuss both opinions and provide your own view.
While some people believe that strict
upbringing
is good
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raise
a child, others feel that firm rules can influence Wrong verb form
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children
negatively. I believe that only a fair amount of rules are needed to keep kids
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kids
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freedom
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On one hand, kids
cannot differentiate between goods and bads. In this
regard, parent
and teachers are good role models for babies. Fix the agreement mistake
parents
Kids
should be aware of the limits. As an example, watching too much TV can result to
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also
can impair children
's unmature
vision. In cases like Correct your spelling
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immature
this
, children
's authority should be limited. In this
regard, strict rules must be set and abide by parents like watching TV only for one hour a day. Moreover
, children
must understand econimical
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must know that they could not own any toy Correct your spelling
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that is
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on TV. Setting financial Correct your spelling
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limitation
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limitations
financial
... in the future.
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finances
On the other hand
, a strict upbringing
can kill the
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Kids
should have the freedom
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For instance
, they can be given a
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the
freedom
to choose what to wear and they can also
pick friends with family's supervision. It is expected that they make some wrong choices,
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children
also
learn essential skills while making mistakes.
To conclude, I believe that children
are very smart. They observe adults and immitate
their behaviour. Teachers and Correct your spelling
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parent
can play an active role Fix the agreement mistake
parents
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upbringing
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite