Some people hold the opinion that children should obey certain rules made by teachers and parents. Others, however, feel that these rules only limit children’s growth and impact their adult life later. Discuss both opinions and provide your own view.

While some people believe that strict
upbringing
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a child, others feel that firm rules can influence
children
negatively. I believe that only a fair amount of rules are needed to keep
kids
within the frame. In
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kids
should be limited along with areas
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they should be given
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freedom
. On one hand,
kids
cannot differentiate between goods and bads. In
this
regard,
parent
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and teachers are good role models for babies.
Kids
should be aware of the limits. As an example, watching too much TV can result
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child obesity and
also
can impair
children
's
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unmatured
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vision. In cases like
this
,
children
's authority should be limited. In
this
regard, strict rules must be set and abide by parents like watching TV only for one hour a day.
Moreover
,
children
must understand
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economical
state of the family.
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must know that they could not own any toy
that is
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advertised
on TV. Setting financial
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for growing babies would develop a skill to manage
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... in the future.
On the other hand
, a strict
upbringing
can kill
the
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creativity.
Kids
should have the
freedom
to make choices
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it is not harmful
for
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them.
For instance
, they can be given
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freedom
to choose what to wear and they can
also
pick friends with family's supervision. It is expected that they make some wrong choices
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adults do. As we learn a lot from our mistakes
children
also
learn essential skills while making mistakes. To conclude, I believe that
children
are very smart. They observe adults and
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imitate
their behaviour. Teachers and
parent
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can play an active role
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upbringing
a child by setting
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level of control for them as desired. While they need
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limitations
in some areas,
freedom
on
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other areas are essential for their stable
upbringing
.
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