Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

Technology is developing rapidly day by day. Because of that,
people
who live in one country can enjoy the cultures of all other areas without considering ages and nationality. I totally agree with
this
statement and I will discuss
further
it within
this
essay.
Music
is a universal language
which
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anyone can understand without knowing the word and the exact meaning.
Music
has its own rhythm that anyone can listen
.
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There are different types of
music
such
as classical, Hip pop, pop, Hindi and many more. Nowadays,
music
widely
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is widely
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spread throughout the world by YouTube, Netflix, Face book and other Social
Medias
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without having any barriers.
For example
, most
of
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the
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Sri
Lankans enjoy
the
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Hindi
songs
which are
the
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mainly
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produce
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produced
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in India.
Furthermore
,
Sri
Lankan young artist Yohani De Silva became the one of
popular
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the popular
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artist
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artists
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in
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all over the world
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with in
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within
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the
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a
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short time period. Most
of
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the
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people
love
artist
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an artist
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who sings their
favorite
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favourite
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song without searching
their
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for their
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age or nationality.
Moreover
, listening to
music
can make a calm person. Most of the conflict was
making
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made
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due to difficulty in idea shearing between two cultures so,
music
is the one of
best
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the best
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solution for it. For
instant
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, after the war in
Sri
Lanka, all
Sri
Lankans without thinking culture enjoy both Sinhala and Tamil
songs
.
Also
, aged
people
like to
listen
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the
songs
of children and some of
children
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the children
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also
like to
listen
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tolisten
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the old
songs
which are sung by elder
people
. So
people
like to enjoy
music
without considering
ages
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their ages
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.
Finally
, I personally believe that
music
is the most suitable bond to bind all the cultures and the different age’s persons together.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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