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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

#people #idea #schools #person #parent #skills
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think
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 that it would be a good idea for
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 to teach every young person how to be a good
parent
. Nowadays, many
teenager
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 together with their partner. If you can notice more of them have no knowledge of being
a good parents
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a good parent
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. They are
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just doing
this
 for their own happiness not think the
future
. And the
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 who
are
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 educated
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are
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 mostly have
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work before they are planning to build a family. If you start teaching them at
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 age they can open their mind and think more good in their
future
 family. Being a good
parent
 is not easy. You need to know yourself
first
 and your partner. Both of you will be the guide of your children someday. A good
parent
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a
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long patience,
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, loving, caring and many more. Learning from school at
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 young age can help them to know what they will gonna do in case of the problem occur. It can help them to solve or manage the
situition
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situation
. They can teach and guide the
basic
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 to be a good
parent
 and after
that
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 if they are in that stage they can continue learning by themselves. Being a good
parent
 is day by day learning by
thier
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their
 own kids
also
. That`s why I agree to start teaching them at
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 young age so that they can study,plan and decide what they will do in
thier
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their
future
 family. Helping the teenager to think twice before they will do something not good in the
future
 it`s a big help
aleady
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already
 to their own parents.
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