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The value of a particular
country
’s exports in various categories in two years (2015 and 2016) is demonstrated in the chart below. The
percentage
 changes of each category compared to the previous year are
also
 calculated and shown in a separated table. As it can be seen, the
country
’s
export
 in all categories except in the case of gems and jewellers rose up in 2016. According to the diagram, petroleum products, as well as engineered goods, provide the most of
export
’s earnings for the
country
.
However
, they had not a remarkable growth in 2016, the highest rise in
export
 in
this
country
 belongs to textiles by 15.24
percentage
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per cent
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 more which added about 5 billion $ to the
country
’s
export
 income. Engineered goods with 8.5
percentage
 growth fall after it. The
country
 experienced little more
export
 in petroleum products and agricultural commodities in comparison to 2015 too. The number of gems and jewellers’
export
 had a fall of 5.18
percentage
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 in 2016. It means that the
country
 had approximately 43 billion $ from the
export
 of precious stones and gold in 2015, and it reduced to around 41 billion $ in the
next
 year.
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