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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, good
behaviour
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 is a crucial character in our everyday
life
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 all over the world because there is a saying that your
behaviour
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 gives your family identity. Anyway, many individuals believe that teaching moral education to infants is the responsibility of
parents
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 while some believe that it is
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 duty which should have been done by teachers. In
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 essay, I will depict both views and
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 I will give my opinion
also
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. On the one hand, I guess,
parents
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 are the primary teacher of infants and their
children
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 are their peers.
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, as we know, from the very beginning of human lives,
children
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 used to learn from their father and mother
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 as they taught their
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 letter,
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 word,
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 identity, about family bonding, about relations with their
parents
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 as well as they have loved to imitate
parents
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 in every sector of their
life
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. So,
parents
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 can easily teach them how would be their
behaviour
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 with their older and with their younger.
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, they will have maintained a sound relationship with society.
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, there is a saying in our country that school is the
second
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 home for all
students
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 and teachers are the builders of their
life
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.
Children
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 have learned from their teachers about
life
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 values and about good characters.
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, a group of researchers found that a teacher is 50% responsible for making good
children
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 as they can handily connect to their
students
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 and
students
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also
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 follow their teacher's advice. If any school administrations want they can keep a moral subject about ethics and good
behaviour
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.
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,
students
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 must have learned it and one day they will have used it in their practical
life
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. In conclusion, good
behaviour
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 is the root of success.
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, different people have a different opinion than how infants can learn about good
behaviour
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 some said by
parents
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, some said by schooling but I think both would have a responsibility to enhance
students
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 morality to build their
life
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 as the best human being in society.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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