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Some say it is the responsibility of teachers to educate behavior to children. To what extent, do you agree with this?

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Some say it is the responsibility of
teachers
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 to educate behaviour to
children
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. To a large extent, I agree with
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 statement. To start with, some may say that it is a parent's duty to teach manners.
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, I believe that it is not the case.
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,
students
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 spend over 8 hours at school. It is even more when
students
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 are needed to attend tutorial classes and after school activities. It is nearly evening already when they come back home. After that, they still need to do their homework assigned by
teachers
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.
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,
Children
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 don’t have time to interact with their parents, not to mention learning manners from their parents.
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, spending a long time at school with
students
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,
teachers
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 are like guardians to them. Not to mention they are the ones to witness the growth of teenagers most of the time.
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, they have the responsibility to guide the
students
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.
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, educating them to be kind and friendly as well as how to communicate well with one other.
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, I believe it is the responsibility of
teachers
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 to educate behaviour
children
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 as they are the ones who have contact with
children
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 more often.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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