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Some people think that the education system only focus on preparing students for employment while others believe it has other important functions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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According to some,
school
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 needs to give education to children regarding
to
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grt
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get
 jobs after their
school
 life whereas, others think that there are many other factors that are
esstional
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emotional
 for teenagers. I personally believe that giving the knowledge about getting
job
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a job
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 is
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. In the upcoming paragraphs, I will discuss these points
To begin
 with, what are the benefits to giving the knowledge for employment in the schools.
First
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 is that it will improve the countries economic condition, to
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celebrate
 it, it will help to people get
job
 easily after completing the education because they already get together with the
job
 conditions.
Secondly
, it will help to reduce the crime rates. After completing study people face difficulty to getting
job
thus
 they follow the crime path which
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directly
 lead to robberies and murders.
On the other hand
, there are many activities that children learn in their
school
 days.
Firstly
, they learn about how to work in
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team work
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teamwork
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 because during the
school
 days children have to participate in
competition
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 where they learn about how to work in a team. To put it in a
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,
although
school
 gives them scholastic knowledge, employment
also
 the
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emotional
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 part of every people to
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 their dreams
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