Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives

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In modern societies, it becomes very common to be seen about
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advertisements. Some
people
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say that advertising
encourges
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encourages
us to buy things that we really do not need, others claim that advertisements
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the info that new
products
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may improve our lives.
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my perspective, I agree that
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advertising
encourage
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us to buy
stuffs
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stuff
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but not really
need
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. To start with, The aims of the advertisements that
people
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see almost everywhere, including internet
platform
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platforms
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, busses, big buildings, is trying to tell individuals that their
products
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are the
lastest
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latest
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or the most advanced in their regions.
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, Apple
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, the head of the
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smartphone
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industry, Apple gave the press conference , and spreading the advertisement in most countries, on TV, billboards, instant apps,
resulting
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the exposure of their newest product with some fancy and cool
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,
such
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as high-resolution camera ,
therefore
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,
young
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generation
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crazy for it, as they can make extreme nice photos and post to instant apps for sharing with others.
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, the
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basic
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is never changed, for making
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a call
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call
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and using some applications both on private life and work.
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, I personally agree that
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some of the
ads
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overweigh their own
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'
function
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for persuading
people
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to follow on .
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, there are many similar
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called healthy manager watch,
such
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as Fitbit, the
function
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is monitoring the fitness, and sleeping time, etc. the companies
also
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invest in
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to tell
people
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it can promote their lives by using it.
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, individuals can regularly visit their doctors and make
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check and get much professional medical advice.
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, improving their own lives style under medical advice without having
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Fitbit watch. To conclude,
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are some advantages of advertising, that can tell
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society what's new recently. But I believe the final goal of
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is only exposure
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to their
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products
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and increase the selling numbers to boost the company's profit. Individuals are buying some
products
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by
ads
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' influence but not really need .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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