Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

To have big bugs and a bit
free
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time
is better than to make a bit
money
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and have lots of free
time
. There are some views about
this
statement. As we know, everyone's
different
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opinion about it. Some people prefer to get big venue from their jobs by spent less their free
time
. Because, they have a view that to earn
quite
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big
money
, you have to work hard to achieve success in their job. The main cause of it
that
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they follow to ancestors way that
time
is
money
,
money
is all.
Therefore
, they dwell on their work to get relax after ending
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it while.
However
, some of them prefer to work that they have to bring home a beacon, so they forget to
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be with their family.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • facilitating
  • lifestyle
  • professional development
  • increased stress
  • work-life balance
  • hobbies
  • quality time
  • physical and mental health
  • financial constraints
  • luxury items
  • overall well-being
  • personal growth
  • middle ground
  • sacrificing
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