It is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married before they are 30, as this is best for both of the individual and for society. Do you agree or disagree?

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Entering into a
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at the
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of 30 is at times believed to be the best that could happen to a person and
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society. I totally disagree with
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due to
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of experience, financial instability and educational instability that will result from it.
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they said is the best teacher. One
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to be advanced in
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to acquire
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ideas relevant
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building a family. A survey conducted to assess the
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stability among people aged 30 and 45 showed that,
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a couple
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couple
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aged four decades and above are
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in their
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than those below that
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owing to the fact that the former is more experienced prior to
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than the latter.
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, skills and qualities necessary for family
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need to be built over time before
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. Moreso, getting married at 30 will leave
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couple
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in financial problems, as they may not be stable in their various struggles in
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to fend for themselves alone talk less of adding another person.
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happened to my younger brother who because he taught he have a handful of wealth, married at the said
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,
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, the
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crumbled as the wife could not cope with being deprived
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of her needs due to lack of money.
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, most undergraduate students are within the
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of 25 and 35,
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, getting married
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time will halt their educational pursuit and later denial of various prospects in
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also
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making the society flooded with school dropouts. Conclusively, because of inadequate
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exposure, bankruptcy and dropping out of school, I think both people and society should frown at the aforementioned
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getting married.
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  • Psychological stability
  • Social maturity
  • Economic benefits
  • Shared responsibilities
  • Ancestral customs
  • Cultural imperatives
  • Personal development
  • Career establishment
  • Societal norms
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Divorce rates
  • Life decisions
  • Subjective wellbeing
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