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It is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married before they are 30, as this is best for both of the individual and for society. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #society
Entering into a
marriage
 at the
age
 of 30 is at times believed to be the best that could happen to a person and
the
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society. I totally disagree with
this
 due to
lack
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 of experience, financial instability and educational instability that will result from it.
Experience
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 they said is the best teacher. One
need
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 to be advanced in
life
 to acquire
much
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 ideas relevant
in
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 building a family. A survey conducted to assess the
marriage
 stability among people aged 30 and 45 showed that,
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couple
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 aged four decades and above are
successful
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 in their
marriage
 than those below that
age
 owing to the fact that the former is more experienced prior to
marriage
 than the latter.
Therefore
, skills and qualities necessary for family
life
 need to be built over time before
marriage
. Moreso, getting married at 30 will leave
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couple
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 in financial problems, as they may not be stable in their various struggles in
life
 to fend for themselves alone talk less of adding another person.
This
 happened to my younger brother who because he taught he have a handful of wealth, married at the said
age
,
however
, the
marriage
 crumbled as the wife could not cope with being deprived
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 of her needs due to lack of money.
Furthermore
, most undergraduate students are within the
age
 of 25 and 35,
therefore
, getting married
this
 time will halt their educational pursuit and later denial of various prospects in
life
also
 making the society flooded with school dropouts. Conclusively, because of inadequate
life
 exposure, bankruptcy and dropping out of school, I think both people and society should frown at the aforementioned
age
 getting married.
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  • Economic benefits
  • Shared responsibilities
  • Ancestral customs
  • Cultural imperatives
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  • Life decisions
  • Subjective wellbeing
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