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Some people belief that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

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It is always argued that some
people
 believe scientific and
buisness
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business
 research should publish free as much as it's possible to benefit everyone, why some
people
 thought some information is too important to be shared freely.in fact, in my point of view, new information and
researches
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research
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 should share freely with limitations.
To begin
 with, in today's modern world which
people
 can access
to
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unlimited sources with one click by Google or other websites it's necessary for them to use the newest and up-to-date
researches
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research
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 in business and academic progress and many scientific subjects.
This
 can help
people
 to use new methods and knowledge in their personal life and business career.
For example
, a manager can read some books or articles which they were wroten from other managers experience in their own job and using their techniques and challenges can be helpful to upgrade managing skills or company improvements.
On the other hand
,
people
 and companies
spent
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 their time and life
on
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doing
researches
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research
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 on different subjects should be benefited from their job while publishing their data and result Freely
also
 can damage their research originality with copyrights.
As a result
, it is a better idea to access all the information in
variety
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subjects
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of subjects
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 with limitations
which
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that
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 can benefit both researchers and users. Publishers
allowed
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are allowed
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 to read or use a part of
article
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an article
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 freely but if users want to read more on that subject should pay and download it completely.
Forexample
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For example
 Apple company have some apps or software's which they are free to download but if you want to access all the facilities in that application you need to buy the premium one. In conclusion,
people
 should benefit from new
researches
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research
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 in business, scientific or education as much as the person who
collect
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collects
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 data and
analyze
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analyzes
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 it.
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