Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of practicular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of
practicular
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particular
species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.
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points will be discussed with
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negatives and positives in the paragraphs below.
Firstly
, in my opinion, a plethora of
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say that the main
evironment
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environment
environmental
hassle of our time is
damage
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the damage
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of specific type of crops and brutes,
on the contrary
,
this
idea is not extremely true. In light of the fact that the harm
vagetables
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vegetables
and beasts
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a reason to a number of diseases, bad air and any more.
For instance
, herbs are release oxygen from it if they
are not exclude
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fresh weather will which may arise numerous ills.
Therefore
, we must nurture greenness with tiere from various things, hereon, we advocate the habitat.
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, some greenery and monstrosities abolishment is
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good method, owning to the fact that,
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among might be
harmfuls
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harmful
,
for example
, toxic vegetation with useless and predator animals.
Thus
, beware and less riddance are not blight.
Secondly
, others say that there
are
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more essential situation proposition and
this
point is
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seriously
opinion due to the fact really to plants and animals rather than there are important environmental problems,
such
as, factories and mill's injurious gas with smokes are immensely hurt for surrounding. In conclusion, in my experience,
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must a plethora of look at
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basal mise en scène issues.
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