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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Changing in real life is essential for many
people
. It can lead us to be better or worse
people
. Some
people
 are happy to live with the same things or avoid
change
. Others believe that changing something can make good things happen. In
this
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 I will examine both views and give my opinion. Looking at the
first
 side, The reason that Many
people
 prefer to spend their time with the same thing which
called
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 “comfort zone”
because
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is because
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 they don’t want to go outside the zone. It can make them feel satisfied.
Moreover
, they believe that their
behavior
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 is
safety
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 and enough to feel happy.
For instance
,
my
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 uncle's business, I represent him to try something new with his company. He refused to
change
. He believes the same way that he manages the company more than
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 them to others. The same daily life can make him feel comfortable.
However
, his company is always growing moderately. Turn on to the other side, To
change
 something in real life is perilous for us. Because no one can predict the future. So, changing
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something can make suffer in the future. In contrast, it can teach us new experiences and can let us know what is our strengths. My brother decided to
change
 his job. He moved from working in rural to urban areas.
First
, he feels stressed but for a
while
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 he feels better and happy with his new job. He told me that moving out
from
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of
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comfort
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 zone is not always bad. It can make us earn a lot of
opportunity
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 and experience. To conclude,
although
 living in a comfort zone is convenient for some
people
. Changing something in a routine day can be beneficial for us. I prefer to explore something new and receive new experiences from them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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