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Schools are no longer nescessary because children can get so much information available through the internet, and they can study just well at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#schools #nescessary #children #information #internet #study #home
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In
this
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 modern scenario,many individuals are habituated to get news through the website using electronic gadgets
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 as mobiles and laptops,so many individuals believe that
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academies
academics
 are unnecessary because they involve with high expenditures like school
fees
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 and greater transport amenities.
although
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 internet brings
people
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 easier to study well by just sitting at home,I completely disaccord with
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 statement.
this
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 essay will go into better detail with my subject view. To embark on,to acquire a good education is very imperative in these days because competition is increasing day by day due to the overpopulation,
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therefore
 studying in
schools
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 may be brought significantly knowledge in terms of communication skills,
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 these skills are very useful to get
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 occupation in the coming days.
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,there is a prospect of getting leadership skills by communicating with different
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.
furthermore
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,we can easily clarify the doubts face to face without any hesitation.
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,we may be inculcated with depth knowledge about that particular topic.
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,
schools
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ensures
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 many facilities
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 as having teachers and libraries.
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,we will learn easily through these amenities. On another hand,there are
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 some advantages of getting information through the internet.
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,
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 is useful for
people
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 who are below poverty in terms of expenditures,
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 they need not worry about school
fees
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 and transport
fees
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.
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,many individuals do not have
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 ability to buy school dresses and books because these are very expensive.
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,having a phone is
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apply
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enough to acquire any information
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 they want.
although
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 there are benefits to
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 trend ,there is
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 one disadvantage is that
people
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 may get damaged their health because phones are very dangerous in terms of
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headache
.
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,according to the world health organisation,many
people
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 are suffering from eye-sight just by using phones continuously. To conclude,
schools
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 play an important role in everyone's life to get more information about the world,but the internet is
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 helpful to poor
people
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 who are unable to pay their
fees
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,but
schools
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 provide quality of education for all
people
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.
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