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Some people say that you can learn more about another country by watching television program and films about it than by actually visiting it. How true is this statement? Is there anything you learn about another country by visiting it that you cannot learn by watching programmes and flims it ? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own experience

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Someone said that it is better if you stay at home to learn more about another country by watching
TV
 or
films
instead
 of going there to learn. That’s right, if you are too lazy to travel somewhere to learn more about that place, or you always stay in the resort or hotel on your vacation. Maybe you are the type of person who doesn’t like to go far from your house. Learning about some country on
TV
 or
films
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in films
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 is not necessarily wrong in
this
 pandemic time.
By
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In
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 that way, you are still learning, but it’s not as good as actually visiting it. If you actually
visit
 a place, you can learn more than
learning
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learn
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 on
TV
 or
films
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in films
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. Because there are many places that
TV
 doesn’t show, you can
visit
 there to have the most authentic feeling. You
also
 can take a lot of photos, eat delicious foods, try many exciting activities,
or
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learn more about historical sites, experience the culture of the other ethnic groups,…
For example
, when going to Phan Rang, you can
visit
 Cham tower,
swimming
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 in the sea, and eat really good
seafoods
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seafood
kinds of seafood
plates of seafood
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,… or Ha Noi, you can
visit
 the Memorial of Literature, Ho Chi Minh president’s mausoleum, or try famous egg coffee of Giang Coffee shop,…
This
 is just a personal opinion, that actually visiting somewhere to learn more about the places is better, and learning on
TV
 or
films
 is not wrong but is not the best way to learn about another country .
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