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What distinguishes young people from their parents' or grandparents' generation is a lack of physical exercise. Today's generation are spending far too long playing computer games, chatting aimlessly on social networking sites or simply watching TV, and too little time being active. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Differentiation between the young
generation
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 and the generations of their parents and grandparent are not only based on being active or
practicing
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 sports. In fact, the comparison could include several elements and essentials other than the sport,
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 as the way of thinking, how to accept others, and level of awareness. Starting with the ways of thinking and how to absorb life events is one of the main conflicts between any different generations.
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, the current
generation
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 is blessed with the existence of
internet
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the internet
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 and social media, which are influencing
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 of awareness and how to see the world
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form
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 a different point of a view. Having the chance to be exposed to the world and the huge amount of knowledge in
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 limitless approach and learn about other people’s experiences from all over the world, is forming the young
generation
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 mind to have higher acceptance of differences in others.
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, the stereotyping of
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social media and computers are wasting
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young peoples’ time is unfair accusing. Since social platforms and computer gaming became an instrument to have a professional career and get a stable source of income out of it.
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, there are significant numbers of teenagers who are following
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several celebrities’
account
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 on social media and consider them as
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role
model
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, which motivates the youth to follow their successful path. Regarding
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 sport and being active,
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also
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 could be easily achieved by the young
generation
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, since online gyms and exercise classes are the
trend
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 nowadays. To
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 end, distinguishing between generations cannot be based on one component or one fact, it has many aspects that need to be in mind.
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