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Write about the following topic. Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

#topic #people #lives #change
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It is argued
that
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whether changes in
lives
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 have positive impacts or not. In my opinion, having changes bring more advantages than drawbacks compared to remaining every day similar. In
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 indicate what are the reasons and why others may disagree with it. Switching to a new environment can provide new aspects and
experience
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 in
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lives
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. Those who work for
government
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the government
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 and sit in the office
everyday
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 may not agree since they find the situation stable and comfortable.
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, once you leave your
cozy
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 job, you may find yourself learning more from a new industry.
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, it is common to see employees, especially in
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marketing positions, jumping from one company to another company. It is because working in different fields creates a refreshing vibe and
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 keeps them inspired.
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, learning from different company culture or managers
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 give them a wider variety of experience. Leaving a comfort zone has a great chance to explore something new and exciting. There are many people living in their born country for their entire
lives
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. Those people may consider being in a different country scary due to the languages they are not familiar with.
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, once you start a journey or live in a new place, there
are
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 plenty of
oppurtunities
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opportunities
 and fun to explore.
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, I was an exchange student in Germany for a year. I was a bit nervous to move to a city that I never lived in.
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, the whole year was nothing negative but interesting. My vision
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 by interacting with people from all around the world and visiting many breathtaking landscapes. To sum up, I believe changes
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 possible to make us grow with new experience and broaden our
horizens
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horizons
horizon
. By changing a job or moving to another country, we can find new sparks in
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lives
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 of missing the whole world out.
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