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Today food travels thousands of miles from the farm to the consumers. Why is this? Is this a positive trend?

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It is a common appearance that
food
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 from the
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farm
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 and really for away to consumers. It is because
people
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 think that
food
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 from designated locations
are
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 better than local
food
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. But
this
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 is a negative trend.
People
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 prefer the
food
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travels
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that travels
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 thousands of miles from the
farm
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 is that they think imported
food
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 is more healthy and
higher
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of higher
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 quality.
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people
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 who like beef, chicken, lamb from the
farm
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. They think
this
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 is organic and healthy. Because these animals have
the
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 good place to
growing
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. There are many advertisements
show
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 the natural
farm
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 from foreign. But
people
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 forgot these meant are from a so far away place.
The quality
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 assurance can’t ensure. The
second
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 reason is that consumers want to try different
food
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 from the product
farm
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. Because of the local
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farm
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farmers
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 don’t have these products or it
taste
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 not good.
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 as some Chinese
people
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 often choose
the
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apply
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strawberry from DongBei in China,
where
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 have the highest quality strawberries in China. Consumers like pineapple, mango from Thailand. Fish from Japan and red wine from France.
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, locally produced
food
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 is always fresher.
Food
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 travels thousands of miles
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from
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form
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from
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 the
farm
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 need to spend more money to keep it fresh. Meanwhile, it will
requires
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 a lot of fossil fuel to get it to the market and
merchant
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merchants
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 maybe add some
antioxidant
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antioxidants
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 to make it don’t be spoilage. So maybe local
food
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 is more environmentally
favorable
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favourable
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. To summarize, maybe the local
food
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better
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is better
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 than some
food
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 from the far away
farm
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. So it is
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a
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bad trend for
people
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’s
healthy
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health
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.
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