Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Rich
countries
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often give money to poorer
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,
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, undeveloped
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such
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as Africa, but it does not solve poverty. As
finiancial
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financial
aid only tend to help temporarily.
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, developed
countries
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should give other types of help to the poor
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rather than that. Perhaps, in
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economy
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and
education
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system
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, I strongly agreed
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the above statements. One of the
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to solve poverty is to help
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wrold
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world
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. The development of a country mainly
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on its
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economy
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system
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and
education
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system
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, rich
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should help them with
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system
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People
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may ask why
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among all the other systems. Well, in the simplest form, no business mean no jobs and even if there
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jobs but no educated
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then
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not helpful at all.
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, to help
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the economy
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economy
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system
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,
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successful companies from developed
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should extend to undeveloped ones.
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, a telecom company
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expanded
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in Burma which
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only
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its citizens with cheaper and better telecommunication but
also
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jobs
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helped thousands of
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in Myanmar.
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, to help their
education
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system
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, educated
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from
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should help not only financially but
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physically.
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, just opening schools in those
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that lack won't make any difference as
uneducated
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an uneducated
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person
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will be
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in charge
of the whole school. The better and
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way is to actually teach them.
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, an educational charity organization lived for almost 2 years in
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the
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pooriest
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poorest
priest
countryside of India and helped them not by just building schools for them but
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by teaching which
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lead to
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out the teachers too. In
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conclusion
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one surely need financial support but
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shouldn't be the main factor. As I've already
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mentioned
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before,
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financial
aid only
help
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helps
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for
short
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a short
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amoung
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amount
among
of time if
their
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is no strong
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economy
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system
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and
education
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system
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, developed
countries
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should help in
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economy
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the economy
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and
education
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system
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to
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the poor
countries
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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