Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well.

Nowadays, teenagers are supported to do the
community
work
in their free time which is made some people think that youngsters should not get
wage
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from
this
kind of job. And
this
might be
benefits
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for them. From my judging, I believe that people should get paid whatever the job is.
Firstly
, doing the
community
worker without pay might teach young
adult
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about sharing and caring but it would be better if they earn what they have
did
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. Some rewards can teach them to know how to manage money as well.
Furthermore
,
this
might be the opportunity for them to find their pathway about what to do in the future
such
as social worker, teacher or career that be relevant.
Secondly
, as I mentioned earlier, everybody
need
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to be paid when it is working. Even it is
community
work
or charity stuff, there
are
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a lot of
cost
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that has
devoted
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.
For instance
, they need to give their time
for
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taking care of children with special needs, elders, disabilities or they have
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spend
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their time to study about working
method
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carefully. Obviously, there are
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an expense
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expense
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for
traveling
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to the workplace. In conclusion, teenagers who do
community
work
without money returns might get benefits in some way but they can do
this
kind of
work
with the reward and still be heartwarming. In the future, the school should provide some extra points for them and it might encourage them to be interested in social
work
and would love to help people more.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

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  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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