Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well.
Nowadays, teenagers are supported to do the
community
work
in their free time which is made some people think that youngsters should not get wage
from Add an article
a wage
this
kind of job. And this
might be benefits
for them. From my judging, I believe that people should get paid whatever the job is.
Replace the word
beneficial
Firstly
, doing the community
worker without pay might teach young adult
about sharing and caring but it would be better if they earn what they have Fix the agreement mistake
adults
did
. Some rewards can teach them to know how to manage money as well. Change the verb form
done
Furthermore
, this
might be the opportunity for them to find their pathway about what to do in the future such
as social worker, teacher or career that be relevant.
Secondly
, as I mentioned earlier, everybody need
to be paid when it is working. Even it is Change the verb form
needs
community
work
or charity stuff, there are
a lot of Change the verb form
is
cost
that has Change to a plural noun
costs
devoted
. Add a missing verb
been devoted
For instance
, they need to give their time for
taking care of children with special needs, elders, disabilities or they have Change preposition
to
Fix the infinitive
to spend
spend
their time to study about working Change the verb form
spent
method
carefully. Obviously, there are Fix the agreement mistake
methods
Add an article
an expense
expense
for Fix the agreement mistake
expenses
traveling
to the workplace.
In conclusion, teenagers who do Change the spelling
travelling
community
work
without money returns might get benefits in some way but they can do this
kind of work
with the reward and still be heartwarming. In the future, the school should provide some extra points for them and it might encourage them to be interested in social work
and would love to help people more.Submitted by whannaphon.pa on
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- Conclusion
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