The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph indicates information about the evolution of electrical
appliances
Change the noun form
appliance
show examples
ownership,
as well as
the period of time which have used for doing house works in one country between 1920 and 2019 .
It is clear that
the percentage of
households
Change the noun form
household
show examples
devices profit exchanged positively comparing 1920
with
Change preposition
to
show examples
2019. The highest point of using
is belonged
Change to the active voice
belongs
has belonged
show examples
to
Refrigerator
Correct article usage
the Refrigerator
show examples
and Vacuum cleaner with the same results of 100%. ,
However
Add a comma
,However
show examples
the level of hours for doing house works
resemblances
Replace the word
resembles
show examples
with
Change preposition
apply
show examples
low results coming to 2019. In 1920 the
quantity
Change the quantifier
number
show examples
of users of washing
machine
Fix the agreement mistake
machines
show examples
was in the lowest part, where the hours of house works had
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
blossoming percentage
such
60%. ,
Moreover
Add a comma
,Moreover
show examples
the process of raising of results of the
Refrigator
Correct your spelling
refrigerator
and
Vacumcleaner
Correct your spelling
Vacuum cleaner
made
similarly
even without any differences in data.
As well as
the time kept
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
similar percentage in raising in years from 1960 to 2019
Submitted by Weallneedit9 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
What to do next:
Look at other essays: