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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing houswork in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing houswork in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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How long housekeepers spent on householding each week
along with
 the percentages of using electrical tools are depicted in two-line graphs in one century, from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
,
however
, there was a noticeable decrease in the time of using electrical devices in
this
 period, the percentages of applying all devices, vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 and washing
machine
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machines
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 has increased. As
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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can be clearly seen, the usage of the refrigerator from 0 per cent rapidly went up to 90 from 1920 to 1960, which
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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moderately grew up and reach
high
Correct article usage
a high
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 of 100 per cent in 1980,
then
 stay able for the
next
 40 years.
According to
 the changed number from 30% to 100%, there was significant progress
for
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in
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 using vacuum cleaners compared to
32
Correct article usage
a 32
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% growth
of
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in
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 washing machine usage from 40 to about 72% at the same time. Comparatively,
washing
Correct article usage
the washing
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 machine’s ascending trend met more fluctuates than the others, even a
slightly
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slight
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 plummet between 1960 and 2000.
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