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Some countries spend a lot of money on making it easier to use bicycles in cities, why? Is this the best way to solve traffic problems?

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Many states are introducing the use of bicycles and are trying to give its financial part to replace other vehicles by it. I believe that it will control traffic jams and pollution to some extent. Many countries spend a lot on changing the type of transport service because it is the main problem of creating traffic rush and pollution nowadays.
To begin
 with, cars in which petrol is used for functioning produce air and noise pollution.
For instance
, owing to the combustion of fuel, cars produce carbon monoxide which pollutes the air and cause many diseases in people related to the respiratory system.
Secondly
, these heavy ways of Transport produce loud noises and create disturbance in the cities. To illustrate, when the automobile pass outside a house or hospital it makes noise due to which no one can take a sleep or study in a quiet environment.
Thirdly
, heavy traffic jam is the main issue created by these big vehicles. I believe
this
 way of using bicycles can solve the problems to some level;
however
, not completely.
Firstly
, if the full population of the country will use cycles, for transit even
then
 there will be a rush on roads and as everyone will be exposed to the smoke coming out of the industries because there will be no barrier in between
such
 as glass window.
Moreover
,work efficiency will become worse because of exertions on the way and reaching late to the job area owing to the slow speed of bicycles.
This
 problem can be solved by introducing public transport as
this
 will lower the number of vehicles on road and every individual will reach the work destination on time. After having discussed the pertinent points related to the subject, it can be inferred that
although
 replacing bikes
instead
 of cars is a good idea;
however
, the government should pay heed and spend more on bringing public transportation which is more beneficial as compared to cycles as a way of transit.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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