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Band 5.5

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph indicates information about the evolution of electrical
appliances
Change the noun form
appliance
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 ownership,
as well as
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 the period of time which have used for doing house works in one country between 1920 and 2019.
It is clear that
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 the percentage of
households
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household
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 devices profit exchanged positively compared
1920
Change preposition
between 1920
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 with 2019. The highest point of
using
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use
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 belongs to
Refrigerator
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Refrigerators
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 and Vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 with the same results of 100%,
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However
Add a comma
,However
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 the level of hours for doing house works resemblances with low results coming to 2019. In 1920 the number of users of washing
machine
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machines
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 was in the lowest part, where the hours of house works had
the
Correct article usage
a
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 blossoming percentage
such
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 60%,
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Moreover
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,Moreover
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 the process of raising of results of the refrigerator and
Vacumcleaner
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Vacuum cleaner
 made
similarly
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 even without any differences in data.
As well as
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 the time kept
the
Correct article usage
a
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 similar percentage in raising in years from 1960 to 2019 years

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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