It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What sort of punishments should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

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The question of correct parenting is widely discussed today. Some people consider that

children

should be able to know the difference between good and evil actions from an early age, and they think that

punishment

can help with that.

However

, in today's world, punishments must be rejected. To start with, there are a few reasons why I think

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doesn't work.

Firstly

, people always make mistakes, even adults, but it is especially painful for

children

. Of course, if you punish the child, he will listen, but it will lead to the case that the child will be less confident and create more problems in the future.

This

can cause a lot of serious problems in the future,

such

as problems with discipline, with colleagues and in society in general.

Furthermore

children

will have bad memories of parents or teachers who use

punishment

, and in the

worst case

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scenario, the child will hate their parent or teacher for whole life.

Nevertheless

punishment

should be replaced by negative reinforcement, which the experts are widely talking about. When

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children

do something wrong, it is better to warn them

first

, and if they repeat it, not allow them to watch their

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cartoons or prevent them from going out and playing with their friends.

This

way they will understand what is wrong and what is right.

Moreover

, they will learn that repeating mistakes

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consequences for them and they should be careful with it.

This

way will make

children

learn more, and they would grow up to be more educated and mentally healthy people In conclusion, personally, I believe that now it is not necessary to punish

children

, and parents need to use more modern methods of upbringing.

Consequently

, it will help raise a more confident generation.

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