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More and more students choose to move to other oversea countries to have the higher education. Does the trend bring more benefits than disadvantages? What is your opinion?

In recent times, countless learners opt to travel to faraway places in order to
further
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 their studies. Does
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 result in more positives than negatives? , I believe the long term advantages of improved service delivery can not be overemphasised.
Therefore
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 in
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 essay, I will tackle both of these views.
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 of all, whenever
students
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 leave the
country
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 for higher learning elsewhere, they weaken the education system in their
country
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 of origin. To put
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 in perspective, the chances to
study
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 abroad are only available to the most intelligent
students
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 of a
country
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 who if they remained there would have added value to the
country
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 and its education system. Take,
for example
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, the current scholarships to
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 overseas that are being offered to
students
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 in Zambia, they are given only to the best and most intelligent at a given period in time.
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 means all the bright
students
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 that the
country
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 depends on, leave to develop another land
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.
On the other hand
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, allowing learners to attain scholarships to
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 abroad, has a long term impact of introducing new ideas that have been acquired from a faraway place.
In other words
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,
students
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 who
study
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 abroad bring with them the newest methods of improving service delivery to a nation.
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, an individual who attains a degree in medicine from abroad brings with him the latest way of treating illnesses to a
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 unlike what he could have had he stayed behind. By way of conclusion, I reaffirm my statement that the long term influence of the
students
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 who
study
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 from faraway places results in new methods of doing things. Going forward,
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 should be allowed for all
students
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.

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