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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#organisations #employees #dress #value #quality #work #appearance
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Part of the employers opines that their workers must
dress
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 smartly for
work
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 , while another part opposes
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 notion as they think the quality of the
work
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 should be more important than their
dress
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. Since some people can't afford much for
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 kind of
dress
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 and wearing some clothes could be affected negatively for the efficacy of the
work
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 ,
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 writer opines that the
dress
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 should not be a problem for
work
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. As a starting point , with the development of competition among different companies for
work
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 , some
employees
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 have asked their
employees
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 to wear smartly.Unfortunately , some of the staff can not afford money for
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 dresses since they are much expensive .
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,
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 will affect their working mentality as well as the quality of
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 .
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 , a recent survey conducted by one of the leading business magazines in Sri Lanka has found most of the workforce do not like to wear smartly since it increases their cost of living badly When we consider these smart dresses, people may find them difficult to wear while they are engaging with
work
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 . unfortunately , some of these dresses could lead to accidents as well . At the same time , depending on the type of
work
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 , it may be lead to reduce the efficacy of
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 .
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 , if a woman with a saree is asked to do , manual labouring in a company , it will invariably lead to reduce the efficacy of that servant. In conclusion , even though some businessmen opines to wear smartly at workplaces , some
employees
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 are refusing
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 since they need to spend much on clothes and some may find it difficult to
work
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 with them . Since
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 writer opines, If a person works neatly , he should have the liberty to wear any cloth that they wnt and
employees
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 should not bother about it.
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