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Some people give more importance to artists ( painters, writers, musicians) in the current age of rapidly developing technology and science. What do you think? Do people prefer arts to technology in your view?

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art in many cases, with the development of
technology
, has become the fundamental source of income for
artists
 and the majority of people praise them as their idols, whereas scientists do not have obtained any attention as
artists
 do so. I completely agree with the idea of people these days seems to enjoy more
arts
 than current expanding
technology
. without a doubt, more scientists and
technophile
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technophiles
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 have a great advantage to using their potential with the advancement of
technology
, making
public's
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the public's
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 lives easier than we used to,
for example
, we used to participate in offline concerts, whereas we can just enjoy art through the internet.
however
, it does not mean that most
folk
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folks
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 change their way to enjoy the
arts
, they believe that in order to contribute to
artists
, they need to buy the physical one, not the digital one. the reason behind
this
 is perhaps the owners that have the platforms, most
artists
 use to promote their
arts
, charge plenty of money to
artists
 that publish their
arts
 on their platform. some may argue that painter has a bad influence on pupils in the context of promoting their
arts
,
however
 not all of them has
bad
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a bad
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 attitude, in fact, most
of
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artists
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the artists
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 promote their culture, religion, ethnicity through
arts
, and they become more productive and obtain a great engagement with the advancement of the internet,
therefore
, society
tend
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 to watch more artisan than scientist since there is a sense of belonging that connects the artist to their audience and they do love to interact with
artists
 ( painters, writers, musicians). in conclusion,
although
technology
 is essential for our life,
community
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the community
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 tend to prefer
arts
 due to sharing the same feelings with the artist and promoting their culture
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