Some people give more importance to artists ( painters, writers, musicians) in the current age of rapidly developing technology and science. What do you think? Do people prefer arts to technology in your view?

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art in many cases, with the development of
technology
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, has become the fundamental source of income for
artists
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and the majority of people praise them as their idols, whereas scientists do not have obtained any attention as
artists
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do so. I completely agree with the idea of people these days seems to enjoy more
arts
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than current expanding
technology
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. without a doubt, more scientists and
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have a great advantage to using their potential with the advancement of
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, making
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lives easier than we used to,
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, we used to participate in offline concerts, whereas we can just enjoy art through the internet.
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, it does not mean that most
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change their way to enjoy the
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, they believe that in order to contribute to
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, they need to buy the physical one, not the digital one. the reason behind
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is perhaps the owners that have the platforms, most
artists
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use to promote their
arts
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, charge plenty of money to
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that publish their
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on their platform. some may argue that painter has a bad influence on pupils in the context of promoting their
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,
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not all of them has
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attitude, in fact, most
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artists
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the artists
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promote their culture, religion, ethnicity through
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, and they become more productive and obtain a great engagement with the advancement of the internet,
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, society
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to watch more artisan than scientist since there is a sense of belonging that connects the artist to their audience and they do love to interact with
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( painters, writers, musicians). in conclusion,
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technology
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is essential for our life,
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the community
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tend to prefer
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due to sharing the same feelings with the artist and promoting their culture
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