Some people believe that spending money on developing technology for space exploration is unjustifiable, and there are more beneficial ways to spend money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the general public
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been discussing the necessity and feasibility
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the cost of developing technology for
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exploration
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. Generally, I believe that
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exploration
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should be added
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the financial plans. It is true that investing
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significant fields
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as education or medical care could grant people chances with
a promising careers
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and
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favourable medical treatment.Especially for people
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live
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in under-developed countries, burdening the extra expenses is less feasible.
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, it does not mean that exploring
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outer
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for a country has any less value. Funding for the
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space
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could play a leading role in national
economy
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progress.
The economic
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development relies on creativity and the advent of advanced technology
derives
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from discovery in
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has been promoted to our lives dramatically.
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, the
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usage of techniques
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as GPS, solar devices or new energy resources drive progress to thrive the high-tech industry.
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, it is almost impossible to adapt to changes and growths if restricting
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in
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space exploration
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space-
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space exploration
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exploration
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.
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,spending money on
space
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research aiming at seeking
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alternative environment could
also
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impact
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future lives. The climate
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to
increasing
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frequency and intensity of extreme weather events could impose pressure on earth,which,
encouraging
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people
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to looking for a safer habitation.That’s means, without
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to
exploring
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the
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renewable sources beyond
planet
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, the
earth
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capacity would suffer severely.
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, the government needs to take a more effective solution under the
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. To sum up,putting the budget on
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exploration
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is much more beneficial than any other
ways
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. It will have a more profound effect both on
nation
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the nation
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and offspring in the years to come.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • justified expenditure
  • technological advances
  • earthly concerns
  • telecommunications
  • environmental conservation
  • inspire innovation
  • diplomatic relationships
  • peaceful cooperation
  • long-term survival
  • colonization
  • commercial ventures
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