Some people believe that spending money on developing technology for space exploration is unjustifiable, and there are more beneficial ways to spend money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, the general public
have
been discussing the necessity and feasibility Change the verb form
has
for
the cost of developing technology for Change preposition
of
space
exploration
. Generally, I believe that space
exploration
should be added into
the financial plans.
It is true that investing Change preposition
to
on
significant fields Change preposition
in
such
as education or medical care could grant people chances with a promising careers
and Correct the article-noun agreement
a promising career
promising careers
a
favourable medical treatment.Especially for people Remove the article
apply
Correct pronoun usage
who live
live
in under-developed countries, burdening the extra expenses is less feasible.Change the form of the verb
living
However
, it does not mean that exploring to
outer Change preposition
apply
space
for a country has any less value.
Funding for the exploration
to
Change preposition
of
space
could play a leading role in national economy
progress. Replace the word
economic
The economic
development relies on creativity and the advent of advanced technology Correct article usage
Economic
derives
from discovery in Wrong verb form
derived
space
has been promoted to our lives dramatically. For example
, the widely
usage of techniques Change the adverb
wide
such
as GPS, solar devices or new energy resources drive progress to thrive the high-tech industry.Therefore
, it is almost impossible to adapt to changes and growths if restricting invest
in Replace the word
investment
Correct your spelling
space exploration
space-
Correct your spelling
space exploration
exploration
.
Besides
,spending money on space
research aiming at seeking the
alternative environment could Correct article usage
an
also
impact the
future lives. The climate Correct article usage
apply
change related
to Add a hyphen
change-related
increasing
frequency and intensity of extreme weather events could impose pressure on earth,which,Correct article usage
the increasing
encouraging
people Wrong verb form
encourages
resort
to looking for a safer habitation.That’s means, without Add the particle
to resort
attempt
to Add an article
an attempt
the attempt
exploring
Wrong verb form
explore
the
renewable sources beyond Correct article usage
apply
planet
, the Add an article
the planet
earth
capacity would suffer severely. Change noun form
earth's
Hence
, the government needs to take a more effective solution under the threaten
.
To sum up,putting the budget on Replace the word
threat
space
exploration
is much more beneficial than any other ways
. It will have a more profound effect both on Fix the agreement mistake
way
nation
and offspring in the years to come.Correct article usage
the nation
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