Social media such as Facebook, Twitter or Instagram has replaced face-to-face communication in our everyday life. Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

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In
this
technological era, social
media
have a greater impact on our daily lives,
that is
why some
people
believed that
such
as Facebook, Twitter, and Instagram have replaced in-person communication in our daily life. In my opinion,
Although
there are a few drawbacks of social
media
platforms, the benefits certainly outweigh them. The primary benefit of social
media
application is that it saves time and is easily accessible to everyone.
In other words
, it helps
people
to connect with like-minded
people
around the world and share the same feelings and thought which used to do in face-to-face meetings.
Moreover
, many celebrities and politicians address the nation on Twitter and deliver a message which is easily reached to the masses and
people
follow them on these platforms and share their thoughts.
In contrast
, despite having benefits there are some drawbacks of virtual communication. Due to the increasing usage of mobile applications,
people
become addicted to them and waste their time surfing around and getting unnecessary updates.
In particular
, the young generation screentime is a lot on websites
such
as Instagram, Facebook.
This
time could be utilized for productive activities. To conclude, I would like to reiterate that while social
media
applications have some drawbacks,
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that advantages are far more.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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