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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 milion vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms od transport shoukd be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the whole world is dependent on cars. These vehicles have now become our necessity. They are extremely helpful in daily activities or
for instance
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 travelling. More and more
people
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 want to have a driving license but have you ever thought
how
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about how
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 it influences
on
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the environment or
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 than these vehicles? There is no doubt that cars are one of the most comfortable
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types
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 of
transport
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.
The society
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 enjoys
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independet
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independent
 and have own comfort zone.
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, my
car
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 is my
comman
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command
common
 centre and I couldn't imagine my life without it.
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, I work extremely far away from home, so I definitely do not miss times when
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I
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 had to go to work by public
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 and woke up earlier. Plenty of
people
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 are in the same situation as me, so in
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case
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 having a
car
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 is the best solution.
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, I am into ecology and I am aware how
our
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what our
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 world will look like in the future if we do not cut off using vehicles.
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, I am keen on riding a bike, it is
great
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a great
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 opportunity if we do not have time to do some sports. It helps us stay healthy and in great condition. I have always encouraged my friends and family to
use
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 type of
transport
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. I consider that the
goverment
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government
 should focus on that and show
people
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 that it is not necessary to
use
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 a
car
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 all the time.
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, in these times we have a lot of alternative forms of
transport
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,
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 as electronic scooters. From my point of view, everybody should try
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 at least once, and
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 experience with that.
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, now many
people
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 have problems with
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, so another wonderful alternative is simply walking. Social media should cooperate with international laws and encouraged
people
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 to do it by
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 campaigns. To sum up, I would like to say that
car
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 ownership and
use
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 should be controlled because many
people
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use
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 a
car
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 situation which does not make sense. Even if
people
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 think that alternative forms of
transport
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 are not their cup of tea, they ought to be encouraged.

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