one of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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improvement makes

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life expectancy.

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invention somehow makes us happy because we might live with our beloved family or friends longer

however

, getting lots of

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in

this

world

will make the environment is unsustainable.

First

of all, the new technologies which used to develop well medical

care

are very useful and help to make

people

stay healthy regardless the age.

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, I am so happy that my grandfather is still with me. He is 80 years old now and a few years ago, he had

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on his eyes so he cannot see anything clearly. Fortunately, due to the invention in medical

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, the doctors can get rid

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cataract on his eyes by doing the surgery and

finally

he can see very clear

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old times.

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medical

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field will make the rate of death

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which will cause our environment

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not sustainable because the amount of

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and any other creatures

is not balance

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.

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will exploit our

world

which is

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bad thing.

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, the population in China is huge and of

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all

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people

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in China have primary needs like food,

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for living, and so on. Based on the book that I have read, China needs to produce 5 million litter of oils for its nation. It is clearly seen

this

exploitation will make our

world

become unstable. In conclusion,

although

the improvement

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medical

care

will make

people

live longer, we need to consider the other elements

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this

world

so it can

be always balance

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. In my opinion,

this

development is very necessary for our lives, but I think the government should create another rule for

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which will limit the exploitation

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our environment so we all can live in peace.