one of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?
It is argued that the impact of medical
care
improvement makes Use synonyms
people
live in a very long time and increase Use synonyms
the
life expectancy. Correct article usage
apply
This
invention somehow makes us happy because we might live with our beloved family or friends longer Linking Words
however
, getting lots of Linking Words
human
in Fix the agreement mistake
humans
this
Linking Words
world
will make the environment is unsustainable.
Use synonyms
First
of all, the new technologies which used to develop well medical Linking Words
care
are very useful and help to make Use synonyms
people
stay healthy regardless the age. Use synonyms
For example
, I am so happy that my grandfather is still with me. He is 80 years old now and a few years ago, he had Linking Words
cataract
on his eyes so he cannot see anything clearly. Fortunately, due to the invention in medical Correct article usage
a cataract
care
, the doctors can get rid Use synonyms
the
cataract on his eyes by doing the surgery and Change preposition
of the
finally
he can see very clear Linking Words
like
Replace the word
as
the
old times.
Change preposition
in the
On the other hand
, the improvement Linking Words
on
Change preposition
in
medical
field will make the rate of death Add an article
the medical
decreased
which will cause our environment Wrong verb form
decrease
is
not sustainable because the amount of Change the verb form
to be
human
and any other creatures Fix the agreement mistake
humans
is not balance
. Change the verb form
is not balanced
is not balancing
Human
will exploit our Fix the agreement mistake
Humans
world
which is Use synonyms
really
bad thing. Add an article
a really
For instance
, the population in China is huge and of Linking Words
course
all Add a comma
,course
of
Change preposition
apply
Use synonyms
people
in China have primary needs like food, Add an article
the people
place
for living, and so on. Based on the book that I have read, China needs to produce 5 million litter of oils for its nation. It is clearly seen Add an article
a place
the place
this
exploitation will make our Linking Words
world
become unstable.
In conclusion, Use synonyms
although
the improvement Linking Words
on
medical Change preposition
in
care
will make Use synonyms
people
live longer, we need to consider the other elements Use synonyms
on
Change preposition
of
this
Linking Words
world
so it can Use synonyms
be always balance
. In my opinion, Change the verb form
be always balanced
this
development is very necessary for our lives, but I think the government should create another rule for Linking Words
human
which will limit the exploitation Fix the agreement mistake
humans
on
our environment so we all can live in peace.Change preposition
of
Submitted by karimamufidah on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?