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In most countries today the number of plant and animal species are decreasing what causing this situation?

#countries #plant #species #situation
Currently,there is much discussion with regard to
decline
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 of
plant
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plants
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 and
animal
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animals
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. It is argued that
nowaday
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nowadays
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 the most
countried
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countries
 are
droping
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dropping
drop in
 the number of
plant
 and animal species because
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human
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humans
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 use a
lot
 of luxury
brand
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brands
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 which the product made from
leather
 of
animal
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animals
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 so that will
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affect
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effect
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affect
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 the natural and the point in
this
 situation is the
weaste
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waste
 water which is the
people
release
 on the river. Nowadays, some
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companies still focus on
the
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sales but
does
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 not concern
the
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 problem which is impact
with
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plant
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plants
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 and
animal
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animals
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 are dowing from the manufactory.
Nevertheless
,most population have a
lot
 of
the
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campaign
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campaigns
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 which protect
animals
 but
others group
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other groups
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 still support
brand
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brands
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 which made
the
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bags from
leather
animals
 and increase the price every year.
For instance
,
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popular
brand
such
 as Chanel, Dior or Hermes still made
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bags from
leather
animals
such
 as
crowdhide
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crowd hide
 and crocodile and most
people
especailly
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especially
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woman who always support
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luxury
brand
 and interesting more than the effect to natural.
Secondly
,the waste is key
of
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this
 problem which the
people
release
 it on the river.
For example
, In Thailand had a
lot
 of
the
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problem
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problems
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about
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with
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 the
waste water
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wastewater
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 in the canal ,particular in Bangkok. When the
people
 use a boat transport will see the water has the black
color
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colour
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 because everyone
stay
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stays
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 near the canal usually
release
 the
trush
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trash
 which is reason to the wastewater which effect to the animal and
plant
 on
this
 place. In conclusion, there
are
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 a
lot
 of
cause
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 which are impact on plants and
animals
 are decreasing
such
 as the
brand
 still
focus
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focusing
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 on
made
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making
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 the goods from
leather
animals
 and the
people
 still
release
 the waste to the river.
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