many people work long hours,leaving very little time for leisure activities.does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

In our era many
people
have to
work
overtime because of their situation in
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or earning more money,
also
we should know all aspect of
this
issue to find respond.
people
who
work
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overtime
, have priority for their employers to get
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as well as additional salary. They can save money more than their colleagues and prepare their needs
such
as
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accommodation
, car and ,etc.
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these
people
are liable to enhance their experiences in
workplace
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better than others. many
people
believe that
heavy
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workload has numerous downsides.
People
who spend many hours
in
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work
, haven't enough recreation for themselves and
also
for their family members. They are usually exhausted and anxious. They
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loose
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most of their
freinds
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friends
because of not enough time to stay in touch. In my view,
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of
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working
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outweigh to advantages.
people
miss
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number of valued moments
such
as
birthday
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,
holiday
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, and ... due to their priority to
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. In
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conclusion
conclution
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it is undeniable that
work
is a crucial part of our
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life
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and
people
strive to find an appropriate vocation, but
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should perceive that
work
-life balance is more important.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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