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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

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Undoubtedly,
schools
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 have become a place where
children
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 learn the facts of living. In
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 regard, parenting is one of the controversial topics that
requires
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 more knowledge to raise healthy
children
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 in the future.
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, some institutions offer parenthood classes in their curriculum to teach the basics of good parenting. From my standpoint, it is essential that every student know how to take care of
children
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 before becoming
mother
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a mother
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 or father. From a psychological point of view, many
children
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 suffer from mental health issues in recent years due to
lack
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 of enough support and attention from their parents. Taking into account
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 issue,
schools
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 could explain the positive consequences of allocating time to their offspring
,
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 and the importance of showing their love to them.
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, some parents ignore their minors’ opinions and sometimes do not let them
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explain their ideas which can lead to low self-esteem in
children
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.
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, if
children
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 get familiar with the rules of parenthood from early
ages
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, they will give their offspring cheerful childhood. From a sociological point of view, the rate of young parents has extremely
increase
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, as a consequence, many babies have been abandoned to foster houses. Henceforth, parenting
subject
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subjects
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 could
be give
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 students
confidence
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the confidence
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 to raise their
children
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.
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, due to immense pressure coming from the hectic life, the majority of people
does
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 not find time to take classes before deciding to become
parent
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a parent
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.
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,
schools
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 could be considered as a perfect time when students can broaden their
horizon
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horizons
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 by studying subjects about the nutrition of
children
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, their mental developments, and their social necessities. To put it in a nutshell, with respect to the whole views mentioned above,
children
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 are the future of communities, and they need to train in a way to have a healthy relationship with their offspring.
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, governments should provide budgets for
schools
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 to make parenting classes mandatory in
schools
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.
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