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Some people think that children should not watch television because it has negative effects, while others believe that televison helps children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The diagram illustrates information on the production of waste in six states from 1980 to 2000. Overall, the US produced more in 20 years whereas Ireland and Portugal did less.
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 and foremost, in 1980, the US and Korea had the highest number of waste production with 131 and 28
million
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 tonnes respectively.
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, during the same period, Portugal and Ireland produced less with 2 and 0.6
million
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 tonnes respectively. Korea had no figures recorded for the year 1980. A decade later, 5 countries had a rapid increase in their manufacturing with the US still leading and having a greater rise from 131 to 151
million
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 tonnes. In the same year, both Portugal and Poland increased by 1
million
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.
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, Ireland had no recorded numbers in the same period. In the
last
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 10 years, 5 countries continued improving their manufacture except for Korea which plummeted from 31 to 19
million
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. In the same year, the US had the greatest increase in production from 151 to 192
million
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 .

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