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SOME PEOPLE SAY THAT SPORT IS VERY IMPORTANT FOR A NATION’S DEVELOPMENT, WHILE OTHERS BELIEVE THAT SPORT IS NO MORE THAN A LEISURE TIME ACTIVITY. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION

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Some
people
 hold the view that sport is necessary for a region’s development, whereas others hold the other view that sport is
only
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 recreational
activity
 for
people
. In
this
 essay, I will explain both views and conclude it. On the one hand, it is clear that sporting success can boost a country’s standing on the world stage.
For example
, Smaller nations may receive attention when their athletes perform well and win medals in an international tournament.
In addition
, They may attract attention to some problems that the nation faces. They can boost the tourism industry by representing their famous tourist attractions. If a nation's citizens are active through playing
sports
then
 they will be happier and healthier which is undoubtedly a benefit of a country's economic growth.
On the other hand
, some families believe that sport is only a
leisure
activity
 for citizens. They play games for fun whether it is playing by themselves or with a team.It is difficult to argue that most
people
 play
sports
 as a
leisure
activity
. Taking part in
sports
 is a way for
people
 to relax and keep fit. It is important for a country’s growth that
people
 play
sports
 no matter what and how they play. In my conclusion, It is clear that
sports
 can help a nation’s development by keeping its citizens healthier, happier and more productive. Athletes
also
 raise their country’s rating on the international level.
However
, Some
sports
 are done for
leisure
 purposes and their own benefits. So It seems that
Sports
 are more than a
leisure
activity
.
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