There is an increasing trend around the world of married couples deciding not to have children. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couples who decide to do this.

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Many married couples globally decided
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not
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children
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marriage
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has its disadvantages, as well as its advantages for
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financial and freedom.
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it comes along with a disadvantage that they do not have anybody to
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them physically in
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old age. On the one hand, some couples argue that, the decision of having
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, the fear of
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their freedom, financial and sacrificing for their happiness
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up late, getting up early because parents have no experience in how to take care of babies and that will increase the responsibility of parents towards their
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increase the
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of worry.
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, the couple tends to have
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leisure time with each other.
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, they would spend on travelling around the world and discovering new places.
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, despite the fact that having
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has a greater impact, which is that you do not have any
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by your side when you are old.
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most old people need physical
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, especially their bodies do not allow them to perform all activities
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cooking, shopping, cleaning and sometimes even walking, they require their
children
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to insist them in
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period of life.
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, most of those who have not had
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struggle in their old age
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as loneliness and
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, according to childless old people find it extremely difficult to cope with their daily lives because their bodies have little strength and they have nobody to
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them. In conclusion,
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choosing to be childless will bring freedom and financial advancement,
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no one
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to
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them physically, which will make their life meaningless during their old age.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • childfree
  • personal freedom
  • financial stress
  • raising children
  • nurturing the relationship
  • societal pressure
  • stigma
  • support network
  • companionship
  • legacy
  • regret
  • intimate bond
  • norm
  • invest in experiences
  • close-knit
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