Your friend recently came to your birthday party and bought you an expensive present. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: >thank your friend > explain how useful the present is > arrange to meet up with your friend sometime soon ​Write at least 150 words.

Dear James, I hope
this
letter finds you well. I am writing
this
letter to thank you for the amazing present that you gave me on my birthday. I am delighted that you came to my birthday party that was held on
2nd
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the 2nd
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of
this
month. Until I
open
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opened
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your present I
haven't
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hadn't
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imagined that you would buy me an
expencive
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expensive
mobile phone as a gift for my birthday. Thank you so much for
this
present. I love
this
mobile a lot and it has a lot of
feature
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features
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. I thought of buying
this
exact mobile
last
year,
unfortunately
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unfortunately,
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I haven't had enough money at that time.
This
is really helpful for me as I am working in the call
center
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centre
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.
This
mobile allows me to add more than ten
person
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people
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in a conference call.
As a result
of
this
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this,
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I am able to complete my work more
quicker
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quickly
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. I would
glad
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be glad
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if I
have
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had
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a chance to meet you again before
to move
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moving
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to
chennai
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Chennai
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. I am free on
this
Thursday and Friday. Let me know if you have time on those days, so
be
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we
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can go for dinner together. See you soon. Yours lovingly, Sarah.
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spellings
Make sure to proofread your writing for minor errors to ensure it appears polished. For instance, the word 'expencive' should be 'expensive' and 'feature' should be 'features'.
language
When expressing the idea that you want to meet, be assertive and clear about the arrangement to ensure it communicates your intention effectively. You could rephrase 'I would glad if I have a chance to meet you again before to move to chennai.' to 'I would be glad to meet you again before I move to Chennai.'
punctuation
Pay attention to punctuation to improve readability. For instance, 'Thank you so much for this present. I love this mobile a lot and it has a lot of feature.' can be split into: 'Thank you so much for this present. I love this mobile a lot, and it has many features.'
task achievement
You have effectively thanked your friend for the birthday present and provided a clear explanation of its usefulness.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear structure with a proper introduction, body, and conclusion.
task achievement
The writing tone is friendly and appropriate for a letter to a friend.
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