Your friend recently came to your birthday party and bought you an expensive present. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: >thank your friend > explain how useful the present is > arrange to meet up with your friend sometime soon Write at least 150 words.
Dear James,
I hope
this
letter finds you well. I am writing this
letter to thank you for the amazing present that you gave me on my birthday.
I am delighted that you came to my birthday party that was held on 2nd
of Correct article usage
the 2nd
this
month. Until I open
your present I Wrong verb form
opened
haven't
imagined that you would buy me an Wrong verb form
hadn't
expencive
mobile phone as a gift for my birthday. Thank you so much for Correct your spelling
expensive
this
present. I love this
mobile a lot and it has a lot of feature
.
I thought of buying Change to a plural noun
features
this
exact mobile last
year, unfortunately
I haven't had enough money at that time. Add a comma
unfortunately,
This
is really helpful for me as I am working in the call center
. Change the spelling
centre
This
mobile allows me to add more than ten person
in a conference call. Change to a plural noun
people
As a result
of this
I am able to complete my work more Add a comma
this,
quicker
.
I would Replace the word
quickly
glad
if I Add a missing verb
be glad
have
a chance to meet you again before Wrong verb form
had
to move
to Change the verb form
moving
chennai
. I am free on Change the capitalization
Chennai
this
Thursday and Friday. Let me know if you have time on those days, so be
can go for dinner together. See you soon.
Yours lovingly,
Sarah.Correct your spelling
we
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spellings
Make sure to proofread your writing for minor errors to ensure it appears polished. For instance, the word 'expencive' should be 'expensive' and 'feature' should be 'features'.
language
When expressing the idea that you want to meet, be assertive and clear about the arrangement to ensure it communicates your intention effectively. You could rephrase 'I would glad if I have a chance to meet you again before to move to chennai.' to 'I would be glad to meet you again before I move to Chennai.'
punctuation
Pay attention to punctuation to improve readability. For instance, 'Thank you so much for this present. I love this mobile a lot and it has a lot of feature.' can be split into: 'Thank you so much for this present. I love this mobile a lot, and it has many features.'
task achievement
You have effectively thanked your friend for the birthday present and provided a clear explanation of its usefulness.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear structure with a proper introduction, body, and conclusion.
task achievement
The writing tone is friendly and appropriate for a letter to a friend.