Some people think governments should build more train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think building more and wider roads is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, with the development of technology, our society becomes more and more convenient
by
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some transport facilities.
Similarly
, the problem of
traffic
jam
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comes to a popular public topic. Some people agree that it is useful to build some lines of
train
or
subway
. While others argue the essence to solve the problem is the build of roads. The
train
and
subway
give
public
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some alternatives to decide the way of
traveling
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which is helpful for the
traffic
stress. There are so many
subway
stations and
train
stop
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stops
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across the city that people can choose
.
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For instance
, we travel somewhere for
the
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vacation by
train
. We
also
take the
subway
when
go
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to work, that
is probably only takes
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a few minutes. So sometimes we prefer
to
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some other transport
instead
of driving
in
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on
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the
road
. If we do not
drive
in
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the
road
as frequently as before, there will no longer have
the
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traffic
problems.
However
,
this
does not automatically mean that only constructing more
train
and
subway
lines is perfect. After all, that cannot decrease the situation directly. In
this
case, I
also
suggest
that
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focusing on the wider roads. The high-developed roads do help people
drive
easily and safely. Imagine a wide
road
allows 8 cars to
drive
in the same direction together
that is
take less time than a
road
only allows 2 cars. The bigger width of
road
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the road
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makes an effort for drivers to
drive
faster.
As a result
of working out
traffic
problem. All in all, due to the fact of busy
traffic
, all we should do is to not only establish the
subway
and
train
lines
,
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but
also
improve the
road
construction.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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