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Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day, other believe that children should be allowed to use their phones. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #children #phones #school
What do you think about using cell
phones
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? Or is it available
such
 as gadgets? The purpose of
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 contentious argument and
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 will give my own perspective on the matter. On one hand, there are many people who argue that
students
 must not use
phones
 during class. The main reason for
this
 is that if using
this
 device, they will not concentrate
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 learning.
For example
, some
students
 will watch Instagram or Twitter
instead
 of books. So the class participation will naturally decrease.
Thus
, negatively influencing their learning process. In spite of these considerations, it is
also
 possible to make the opposing case. Sometimes, cell
phones
 are tools that can be used to help
students
 and teachers when
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 emergency situations. To illustrate, something unexpected occurred in
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children
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 are able to call immediately the police.
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 conclusion, I believe that both arguments have their merits. Clearly, it is the problem
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 how to deal with
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. On balance,
however
, I tend to believe that
permiting
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permitting
 cell
phones
 are more beneficial to
students
 during their learning process.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distraction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Concentration
  • Emergency communication
  • Digital literacy
  • Educational resources
  • Social development
  • Self-regulation
  • Enforcement
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Technology access
  • Learning apps
  • Screen time
  • Peer interaction
  • School policy
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