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Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions

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It is
known
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 issue that human beings are causing global warming where it is getting
worser
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worse
 and
worser
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worse
by
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the
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time passes. As the population of humanities grows rapidly, the more damage we create to our planet earth. One of the greatest dangers is melting
gracier
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glacier
glaciers
, which impacts the level of the ocean. There are
numbers
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 of categories that cause
this
 immense issue today. In
this
 essay,
i
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 will discuss
about
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what are origins of global warming and its solutions. 
First
 of all, one of the main reasons
of
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for
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temperature
temprature
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the temprature
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 increase in our planet is the
amount
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 of
carbons
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carbon
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 produced by electricity generations, which uses
coals
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coal
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 and fossil oils.
Such
 pollution of carbon can
result
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inresult
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 huge damage
on
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 the atmosphere.
Therefore
, the solution for
this
 matter
may be
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maybe
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build
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 more technology that uses solar and wind and reduce the amount of usage
on
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 coals and fossil oils.
Second
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 cause of global warming is deforestation and tree-cleaning. Rainforests and
trees
 are important aspects of observing dangerous chemical combinations in the air
,
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 and produce more oxygen
instead
.
However
, because of humans' food and urban
infrastucture
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infrastructure
 development needs,
trees
 and forests had been cut or burnt.
Hence
, in order to solve
this
 problem, countries should plant more
trees
 and reestablish reforests as much as possible.
Moreover
, people
also
 should shop more sustainably. At the end of all, I believe our ultimate goal as a community is to leave our planet as healthy as possible
to
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 our children. It is clear that our actions as individuals and countries as
decision makers
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,
we
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are putting ourselves in
this
 situation as
consequences
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.
Thus
, let's be more aware
what
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 actions are we taking against our chaos, try our best to use less
electricty
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electricity
, and plant more
trees
.
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