In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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country
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, few individuals think that
money
should be invested
on
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new
railway
networks for fast trains between cities. Whereas, others believe that
money
should be spent
in
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previous
transport
to make it better.
However
, in my opinion,
government
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the government
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should invest in
new
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railway
line. In
this
essay both
the
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views are discussed below. To start with, in my view,
government
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should spend their
money
on new fast trains. One of the main reason is, it
take
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less time for
people
to travel from one place to another.
For example
, in Japan the bullet train can cover 350 kilometres in one hour, it is easy and convenient to travel within less time.
In addition
,
first
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railway
network between two cities is
also
beneficial and developing
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economically. In
other word
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, fast root can
also
improve the
transport
of goods in very less budget.
Hence
, cities can develop faster when they connect
by
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fast
railway
networks.
On the other hand
, many
people
think opposite that
money
should be invested
on
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existing
transport
to modify and add some extra
facilities
.
For instance
, investing
money
on
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previous
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the previous
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railway
network can save the budget and
remaining
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money
should spend on different things.
Moreover
, due to
invest
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on
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other
facilities
like electric
line
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lines
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and sewer
line
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lines
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should
also
improve the convenience of the passengers. To continue with,
government
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the government
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should spend
money
for
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older
people
and their accommodation on
railway
stations for easy travelling.
As a result
, spending
money
in
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different
facilities
and
existed
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transport
can
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helpful
helpfull
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in many
way
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ways
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for
traveling
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people
. To conclude, in my opinion,
government
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the government
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should invest their
money
in
new
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a new
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railway
network to
fulfill
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the
passengers
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passenger's
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facilities
instead
of improving existing
transport
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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