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Many supermarkets are selling more and more products that are imported from other countries instead of selling food that is locally sourced.

#supermarkets #products #countries #food
Importing
products
 from various countries is constantly being a controversial issue. Some
people
 agree with importing
products
, and some don’t. In my opinion, importing
products
 will damage local
businesses
.
People
 support the concept of importing
products
 referred to by importing the cost of foods and fruits are decreasing, and the benefit goes to
customers
 who want to buy
products
 with less price. On the other side, with various foods and fruits, supermarkets can get new
customers
. In the end,
this
 is a win-win condition for everybody, especially for the economy. On the other side, many local
businesses
 want to sell their
products
 to
customers
 who live in their region,
although
 new brands from different countries change
this
 situation. Local
businesses
 have to compete with other corporations, which means they must drop their
products
’ prices more painfully, giving less finance to their employees.
This
 situation may go to an economic crisis, which means that workers may strike. Apart from
this
 aspect, if a country has a product,
such
 as a banana, it would be wrong to import from other countries. I think in
this
 situation we should see the big picture
instead
 of
customers
’ benefit. By and large, some
people
 consider that importing local
businesses
, especially employees, will be harmed. On the other side, some
people
 believe that
this
 action benefits
customers
.
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