The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
The maps present the changes
occurred
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that occurred
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on the
island
.
Overall
,
in
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the difference between
construction
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the construction
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of some tourist facilities lies in the development of numerous
of
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houses
as well as
roads, which have been replaced by
primeval
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primaeval
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land,
This
had led to an expansion of the
island
. Before the development, there were few trees on the
island
with the beach in the west. The total length of the
island
is approximately 250 metres. Moving into the
next
map, there is
central
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the central
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reception, which is surrounded by
vehicle
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a vehicle
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track in the middle of the
island
. The vehicle track goes off in
an
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southeastern direction, the pier is built.
Restaurant
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is
on
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the
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opposite
of
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the pier. There are two accommodation areas connecting with
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the foothpath
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foothpath
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footpath
.
Furthermore
, the tourist can swim near
by
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the beach in the west. To summarize the two maps, there are significant changes. Not only lots of facilities are built on the
island
, but the sea
also
is used for activities. The new
island
has become a good place for tourism.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "goes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "goes" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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