Some people think the main purpose of school is to turn children into good citizens and workers, rather than to benefit them as individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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day and age, various people assume that good education might lead children into a shape to contribute to their communities while others tend to let students grow freely. From my perspective, schools might teach young adults essential skills to make contributions in order to open up opportunities for making the world greater.
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of all, due to the development of the high-tech world, numerous work possibilities have been created in which children have different orientations for their future.
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, children could live with their passion and make money for good. In fact, traditional jobs would be replaced by robots and AI which might create serious social troubles
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as unemployment, manifestation.It has been proved that inspiration might be a vital reason for young adults to continue to work for their future.
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, several researchers have indicated that in the
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five years AI will replace teachers and workers which might result in a wave of unemployment.
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, educating a good generation might urge them to be more creative rather than follow traditional solutions. While traditional education might perfectly create a machine in a short period of time since
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pupils might upgrade and figure out new abilities.
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, from the past until now, geniuses are people who always find out new opportunities to discover mysteries and unknown knowledge which might be an answer for human secrets in order to give a helping hand to improve
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living standards.
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causes various disadvantages
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as high tech rebellions, criminals. In conclusion, institutions might let the young individually grow and learn useful skills for their aim. I strongly agree that good education is self-development which come along with self-esteem.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial
  • shaping
  • developing
  • unique talents
  • potential
  • well-rounded
  • academic
  • social
  • emotional development
  • personal growth
  • contribute positively
  • self-expression
  • creativity
  • individuality
  • happier and more fulfilled
  • strike a balance
  • preparing students for the workforce
  • nurturing
  • individual needs
  • pursue passions and interests
  • thrive
  • future professionals
  • community institutions
  • shape community values
  • foster civic engagement
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