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The amount of drinkable water for people is decreasing. Why is this? What can be done?

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While the path for human civilization is showing advancement day by day, the effects that are caused to the earth is devastating and it is often irreversible. One of the main issues that people all around the world are facing is the decline in the amount of drinkable water. There are many causes for
this
 drop in resources and there are some solutions that can prevent it. One of the main causes that drinkable water is decreasing is due to industrial misuse
that is
 being dumped in freshwater reserves like rivers, lakes, and
such
. While these factories are producing goods for trading purposes, the remaining byproduct, which is often toxic to the environment, is being dropped in freshwater lakes.
This
 procedure is tainting the water to
such
 a degree that it can no longer be filtered to be drinkable. Another major cause is global warming. While the earth is warming gradually, our freshwater resources are decreasing by evaporating, and because of all the pollution in the atmosphere, some rain waters are becoming too acidic to be collected for drinking. There are a few useful solutions to prevent the loss of
this
 valuable resource. By using eco-friendly products and recycling our produced misuse, we can greatly reduce the amount of waste
that is
 being dumped in the drink by factories that are making products with non-biodegradable resources.
Furthermore
, by switching our source of energy from fossil fuels to renewable sources, like solar panels and wind energy, we can eliminate the effects of it global warming, which
as a result
, aids the reservation of drinkable rain. Overall, the problems are caused by global warming and tainting drink bodies with toxic waste from industries. The solution for it can be switching our daily products to eco-friendly ones and changing our source of energy from fossil fuels to a renewable alternative source.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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