We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer technology. It is used in business, crime detection and even to fly planes. What will it be used for in future? Is this dependence on technology a good thing or should we be suspicious of its benefits?

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Computer

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is used in business,crime detection and even to drive vehicles,and we are becoming more and more dependent on it. What we will do with it in the future? Should we doubt

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or is reliance on

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a good thing?

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to do a lot of work,

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is not a good thing because people need to check it when it is wrong, and if they rely on it so much at

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when it goes wrong we will probably spend a lot of

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can calculate several times faster than human,so

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because we have to use it to make the world go faster. In conclusion, I think

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do not think defence on

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer technology. It is used in business, crime detection and even to fly planes. What will it be used for in future? Is this dependence on technology a good thing or should we be suspicious of its benefits?

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You wish to study at a foreign university. Write a letter to the university. In your letter you should ask about: the accommodation and fees possible scholarships and the qualifications required for acceptance.

Some people think that certain old buildings are more worth preserving than other ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Individual greed and selfishness have been the basis of modern society. Some people think that we must return to older more traditional values such as respect for the and the local community in order to create a better world to live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example, working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood, or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, companies allow people to work from home. In others, people are still expected to work in an office. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer technology. It is used in business, crime detection and even to fly planes. What will it be used for in future? Is this dependence on technology a good thing or should we be suspicious of its benefits?