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We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer technology. It is used in business, crime detection and even to fly planes. What will it be used for in future? Is this dependence on technology a good thing or should we be suspicious of its benefits?

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Computer
technology
 is used in business,crime detection and even to drive vehicles,and we are becoming more and more dependent on it. What we will do with it in the future? Should we doubt
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 benefits
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 or is reliance on
this
technology
 a good thing?
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 think
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computer
technology
 will
being
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 used in
driverless
 cars,trains,and even in civil aircraft.people becoming more and more busy day by day, they usually use a little bit
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 to do a lot of work,
then
time
 is precious to them, so
driverless
technology
 is developed and released to the general public is needed.
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but is now driving
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car,which forces him to stop the car before doing so, but if he is in a hurry to get to a meeting ,
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driverless
 car would make him much more
effcient
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efficient
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Secondly
, I do not think reliance on
computer
technology
 is not a good thing because people need to check it when it is wrong, and if they rely on it so much at
this
time
, we do not have enough ability to fix it,
for instance
 ,if we rely too much on
cumputer
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computer
technology
 when it goes wrong we will probably spend a lot of
time
 checking it
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 because
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the computer
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 can calculate several times faster than human,so
this
 will take a lot of people’s
time
. We should not be sceptical about its benefits, but should always check whether every major decision
it
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 because we have to use it to make the world go faster. In conclusion, I think
computer
technology
 will be used on
driverless
 transport,
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 do not think defence on
technology
 is a positive thing,and we need to take
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 of its benefit,
also
 keep the ability to check it when it makes a mistake
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